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I.   Warning

A boundary of warning issued premature
to a lad settled on adventure
will plant definition in a red
corruption code of ketchup on a
post-picnic bib orphaned to the wind
like a fictional friend's home continent's flag

The vision-fielding velocity of neighbours'
aarows augment the sleep-shearing flares
of the father's eyes in the centrifugal
bullseye of his boy's current-green nursery
so close to swelling wide as a planet
now a marble left behind in favour of
a shrunken moon's spheric promise
of an otherworldly adventure

II.   Island

Subservient to boundaries of none but its own
the loner of landmass nurses its nautical mischief
through the employment of sensual labour in darkness
sizing them up to encompass a knowing glow
for the enigmas of bare-faced daylight

The premature thirst for adventure
attended to by the drink of sanctuary
poured from the skew of its welcome-mat shore

III.   Neighbours

Game and Disappearance serve
the Monarchy of Volume under code names
of Hide and Seek undertaking missions in the name
of circumstantial viceroys: decibels
scanning search parties through the x-ray of silent night
for the orchestration of the morn

Tweeting birds equate an army horn
rainbowing the insurgent black sky
with adventures in crusade-recital grooming

An airy beach of reeds is looming
in the coastal fog bracing to embrace
the route taken on the faith of melodic compass

IV.   Discovery

No labourer of mortal being beats the sun
out of bed not even the little one
succumbed to slumber in the bony shadow
of the instrumentally inscrutable contestant
to the claim of composition by his
solar brother's sacred nursery rhyme
insuring the rest and energetic rise of time

This adventure-hearted child heard no battle cry
in what the rivals of his bearded babysitter
dubbed The Sound Of Panic
just the anthem of a little conqueror beneath
a bucky smile of approval on the heels
of a swim befitting of an older lad but not
the aura of exhaustion conquering
the eyes of a goal imagined and achieved
and the smiling gratitude duet in return
from the dutiful and loving neighbours
lulled to their reunion reed field
in anticipation of a father's target met
with a son's accuracy in tow
Best known in recent years as the title of Pink Floyd's first album (as well as popping up in a few other places), it was taken from a chapter of The Wind In The Willows by Kenneth Grahame. Having just finished the book recently, I can clearly understand what drew the band (essentially the leader, Syd Barrett) to the title.

Now I've read a lot of stuff in my life - including five years of literature and history in university alone - and NEVER have I been brought to tears by anything I've read anywhere, till I got to Chapter 7 of this book. (And why chapter 7? If you look up my birthdate on my profile, you'll see why I ask that). I don't know...something about that chapter just resonated with me.

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willyamPax Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
i just want to tell you my friend your amazing...
Kublakhan27 Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you my friend, I'm always grateful for your kind words.
willyamPax Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
oh your here... hehe... i came here very often now... your most welcome
Kublakhan27 Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is the first time I've been here in a few days...I'm not around here as often now...if I start surfing the site I'll be here all day haha
willyamPax Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
haha.... I'm not like that anymore....i don't peak into my watch list anymore... it will indeed take the whole day to finish it all or days... i have 366 stacks... and each stacks contains 200 to 300 and some less... that's because i have lots of groups i had join in...
Brici5 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2012  Student Writer
this is unbelievable
you left me speechless I admit, I've rarely seen such poems
this atmosphere was settled so well, and it is so detailed and animated
great job!
Kublakhan27 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I hold this one close to the heart so that means the world to me :)
archelyxs Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2011
You create the kind of atmosphere here that I want to get lost in.
"so close to swelling wide as a planet
now a marble left behind in favour of
a shrunken moon's spheric promise
of an otherworldly adventure"
Amazingly beautiful.
Kublakhan27 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much :)
BackupPanic Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2011   Writer
The entirety of "IV. Discovery" clearly makes it worth the effort of unraveling, 'tis so good.

Though I'll tell ya, through my own personal (and sub-par) attempts, brevity can not be overstated in gettin' people to seriously consider works of this type.
Kublakhan27 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I'm glad you liked the last part best cuz that's the effect I was hoping for :) and yeah, I know what you mean about shortest pieces seem to get more attention for better or worse :P
BackupPanic Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2011   Writer
:salute: Truly a shame, to be sure.
Kublakhan27 Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Yep I hear that x_x
YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2011   Writer
this is terrific. I'm a contributor to #Word-Smiths, and would have voted yes
on this, had it not been voted on/against before I saw it.

well done.
Kublakhan27 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I'm glad you liked it and I appreciate the compliment very much :)
forlorn-eldritch Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I second this as another contributor to #Word-Smiths. Your imagery is vivid and intriguing, and your love of language evident. I am intent upon adding this to my favourites.
EmmaSloane Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2011
Wonderful, Steven. You've made the Piper vivid again.
Kublakhan27 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the compliment and the fave, much appreciated :)
EmmaSloane Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2011
Your poem made me smile at a memory.
Kublakhan27 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
That's cool, it feels good to know that one of my things actually meant something to someone in some way. Thankfully it was a positive memory :)
spoems Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2011   Writer
fascinating. having not read The Wind In The Willows, i find myself intrigued, but effectively lost trying to decipher this piece. can you provide any additional insight?
Kublakhan27 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This poem seems to be confusing a lot of people, which is puzzling to me in turn because I've read some extremely abstract poetry on this site that borders on nonsensical, yet their comments show glowing reviews. I thought I was just putting a personal take on a story that was already a cult favourite. So the feedback I've been getting on this has been somewhat frustrating with all due respect. I'm not saying this in a confrontational way, it's just you're not the first to question the subject matter of this poem, when there are countless more poems on this site that merit that line of questioning way before this one, in spite of some of them being very well-reviewed, but that's what I'm up against. Again, if I come across as confrontational, I apologize for it; it's not my intention to be that way.

The only way I can really elaborate on it is by giving a general summary of the chapter. It basically involves the two main characters, Mole and Rat, setting out to search for the son of a neighbour (an Otter) who had disappeared. The son had recently learned to swim and had shown promise beyond his youth, prompting the father to believe he may have gotten ambitious and caught up in a current or what-not. While searching up the river in their boat, the pair start to hear pleasant music and find themselves following the direction of the sound. Just as morning breaks, the pair wind up on an island, where the music brings them to an encounter with the Greek God Pan, who is lovingly overseeing the missing otter as he sleeps. Mythology has suggested that Pan may have created music by blowing into a row of reeds; it's even been suggested that he's the oldest god, older than Zeus, and the creator of nature. There are also accounts that suggest his brother, Apollo, created music. What all the stories agree upon is that Apollo is the sun god, and brings morning to the land on his nightly chariot trip. He is a noble character and a favourite among Zeus and virtually all the other gods.

Pan, on the contrary, is said to be a mischievous god, who liked to chase and tease others; he has the general anatomy of a dishevelled goat (which kind of coincides with the image of Christianity's Satan, who is said to have cloven hooves) and is considered to be a dubious god, and one to avoid. But the Pan who greets Mole and Rat has an air of pleasantry - though he doesn't speak - and is nothing like those accounts suggest. When the trio reunites in Pan's company, he puts some kind of spell on them that makes them forget meeting him, leaving them with the question of where the music came from that brought them all together.

From a conversational standpoint, I'd also like to mention that the entire novel strikes me as being very Shakespearean; I'm sure he was an influence on Kenneth Greahame though I haven't actually looked that up. It's also an Orwell-esque story, loosely in the spirit of Animal Farm but with a more positive storyline.
spoems Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2011   Writer
wow. thanks for the in depth explanation of the contextual origins. i look forward to reviewing this piece again with my new insights. :)

as for not receiving like praise for your abstractions versus another, i can say from direct experience (being an abstract poet, myself) that it all depends on your audience and how accepting, non-judgmental they are when they read your work. if you remain true to your voice, your vision, you will eventually develop a reliable following - one that isn't afraid to be open to your form of expression. but this method of verse is not as likely to be extremely popular here on dA or out in the real world of published authors as more traditional poetic metaphors. but i say, who cares? and keep at it.
Kublakhan27 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
No problem, I'm glad that it helped :) You're right, I just have to move on to the next poem...after all, I can't really change my identity or voice as far as writing goes so I'll just hope that at least some of the write in the future will have some kind of audience :)
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