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I.   Warning

A boundary of warning issued premature
to a lad settled on adventure
will plant definition in a red
corruption code of ketchup on a
post-picnic bib orphaned to the wind
like a fictional friend's home continent's flag

The vision-fielding velocity of neighbours'
aarows augment the sleep-shearing flares
of the father's eyes in the centrifugal
bullseye of his boy's current-green nursery
so close to swelling wide as a planet
now a marble left behind in favour of
a shrunken moon's spheric promise
of an otherworldly adventure


II.   Island

Subservient to boundaries of none but its own
the loner of landmass nurses its nautical mischief
through the employment of sensual labour in darkness
sizing them up to encompass a knowing glow
for the enigmas of bare-faced daylight

The premature thirst for adventure
attended to by the drink of sanctuary
poured from the skew of its welcome-mat shore


III.   Neighbours

Game and Disappearance serve
the Monarchy of Volume under code names
of Hide and Seek undertaking missions in the name
of circumstantial viceroys: decibels
scanning search parties through the x-ray of silent night
for the orchestration of the morn

Tweeting birds equate an army horn
rainbowing the insurgent black sky
with adventures in crusade-recital grooming

An airy beach of reeds is looming
in the coastal fog bracing to embrace
the route taken on the faith of melodic compass


IV.   Discovery

No labourer of mortal being beats the sun
out of bed not even the little one
succumbed to slumber in the bony shadow
of the instrumentally inscrutable contestant
to the claim of composition by his
solar brother's sacred nursery rhyme
insuring the rest and energetic rise of time

This adventure-hearted child heard no battle cry
in what the rivals of his bearded babysitter
dubbed The Sound Of Panic
just the anthem of a little conqueror beneath
a bucky smile of approval on the heels
of a swim befitting of an older lad but not
the aura of exhaustion conquering
the eyes of a goal imagined and achieved
and the smiling gratitude duet in return
from the dutiful and loving neighbours
lulled to their reunion reed field
in anticipation of a father's target met
with a son's accuracy in tow
Best known in recent years as the title of Pink Floyd's first album (as well as popping up in a few other places), it was taken from a chapter of The Wind In The Willows by Kenneth Grahame. Having just finished the book recently, I can clearly understand what drew the band (essentially the leader, Syd Barrett) to the title.

Now I've read a lot of stuff in my life - including five years of literature and history in university alone - and NEVER have I been brought to tears by anything I've read anywhere, till I got to Chapter 7 of this book. (And why chapter 7? If you look up my birthdate on my profile, you'll see why I ask that). I don't know...something about that chapter just resonated with me.

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willyamPax Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
i just want to tell you my friend your amazing...
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Kublakhan27 Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you my friend, I'm always grateful for your kind words.
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willyamPax Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
oh your here... hehe... i came here very often now... your most welcome
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Kublakhan27 Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is the first time I've been here in a few days...I'm not around here as often now...if I start surfing the site I'll be here all day haha
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willyamPax Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
haha.... I'm not like that anymore....i don't peak into my watch list anymore... it will indeed take the whole day to finish it all or days... i have 366 stacks... and each stacks contains 200 to 300 and some less... that's because i have lots of groups i had join in...
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Brici5 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this is unbelievable
you left me speechless I admit, I've rarely seen such poems
this atmosphere was settled so well, and it is so detailed and animated
great job!
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Kublakhan27 Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I hold this one close to the heart so that means the world to me :)
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2011
You create the kind of atmosphere here that I want to get lost in.
"so close to swelling wide as a planet
now a marble left behind in favour of
a shrunken moon's spheric promise
of an otherworldly adventure"
Amazingly beautiful.
:heart:
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Kublakhan27 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much :)
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BackupPanic Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2011
The entirety of "IV. Discovery" clearly makes it worth the effort of unraveling, 'tis so good.

Though I'll tell ya, through my own personal (and sub-par) attempts, brevity can not be overstated in gettin' people to seriously consider works of this type.
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